I understand what you're trying to establish here and I like it, but some of the sequencing of events mentioned are a little off. For example, in 190 AU there were only 36 known skylands (this was back during SR2.1). The Principality Wars, during which Admiral Svendheim rose to fame, ended 34 years earlier in 156 AU. You may want to rethink the timeline and date of the ratification of this document. There's something else that bugs me about this article too. Though it is enclosed in a "theories of interpretation" section, the current version includes an obvious 'dig' at the Red Faction that is uncharacteristic of the Free Skybrary. Say what you like on your User pages; a Faction's page is almost expected to spout propaganda :) , but everything else should be pretty unbiased. --Calvin November t/c on 03:27, 25 August 2008 (UTC)
I rolled back from Deyo's edit to the previous incarnation. For reference, Deyo edited the article as follow: "Skytopia has no law. Individual governors rule their skylands without question or oversight. The suggestion that any body of law exists binding the Skylands is treason, and making the suggestion is punishable by death." Let's try to be more sociable than that, okay?Burrito Loco t/c on 12:00, 25 August 2008 (UTC)
I'm not seein' it. 19:11, 25 August 2008 (UTC) - Deyo
Dodgson's take (at http://skyrates.net/forum/viewtopic.php?t=4755&start=30 ) was especially well put. Could/Should these 'Articles' be retooled a bit to be similar to the US's Articles of Confederation? Should this page be renamed to 'Articles of Skytopian Confederation'? --Calvin November t/c on 18:17, 26 August 2008 (UTC)
The current edit feels better, as it seems to be less 'all skylands and all factions did this!' surprise! I'm still uncomfortable with major in-game political and legal points being written solely by players; Thats meddling a little too much with other players, and more importantly, the devs.
And, secondly, though this may be a bit of a split hair, the term 'flavor text' implies, to me, something either irrelevantly frivolous, or something commonly accepted but not all that relevant to the game. The Tortugan upheaval can not be flavor text, but an individuals description of what they did during the upheaval is probably flavor text (IE, Sharon's diary post about this is excellent flavor text and very good RP) The R&P itself probably falls under flavor text; The facts that Eltsina has a submarine, L. Islo is missing, and Lord Gil runs the Echo Flight School are not. Ell